Guided Writing/Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion - Was ist das?
Wie schon kurz erklärt, soll ein Text inhaltlich zusammenpassen. Einzelne Sätze werden durch linking words (Konjunktionen) miteinander verbunden.
Wer immer wieder zwar sprachlich richtige, aber (zu) kurze Sätze nach dem Muster S - V - O erstellt, ohne diese sinnvoll zu verbinden, bekommt in diesem Teil nur wenige Punkte.
How to use linking words
Last week. It was a sunny Sunday. A sky without any clouds. The perfect weather for an amazing and two hours taking open-air-concert of “The Rising Son of New Orleans”.
I had checked my bag. Camera, although it isn’t wasn't allowed. Something to eat and to drink. My head. And enough money to buy his new CD.
→ Ein Text, der fast nur aus Ellipsen und Parataxen besteht, wirkt zwar schnell und wie eine Live-Reportage, ist aber doch schwer zu lesen.
Last Sunday it was sunny. The sky was without any clouds. It was perfect weather for an amazing open-air-concert of "The Rising Son of New Orleans".
I had checked my bag, Camera, although it wasn't allowed to take one. I had something to eat and to drink. And I took enough money to buy his new CD.
→ S - V - O - zu jedem Satz gehört mindestens ein Subjekt und ein Verb. Besser als die Häufung von was und had wären andere, abwechslungsreichere Tätigkeitswörter.
Last Sunday the sun was shining and the sky was without any clouds. So it was perfect weather for an amazing open-air-concert of "The Rising Son of New Orleans".
After I had packed something to eat and to drink and enough money to buy his new CD I checked my bag again: there was the camera, although it wasn't allowed to take one.
→ Aus sechs kurzen Sätzen wurden drei längere, die durch Konjunktionen und inhaltliche Bezüge besser zusammenpassen.
When you join sentences together, use conjunctions - like however, although, moreover …!
Don't repeat "and" and "but" all the time.
Interactive exercises
Pocahontas (conjunctions)
Put in the conjunctions:
the English had settled in North America, John Smith began exploring the new country.
he was walking through the forest he encountered a beautiful girl, Pocahontas.
she was distrustful of him, her grandmother liked him.
she teaches him to hunt.
She is set to be married to Tsu'Tey, a great warrior, a serious man who Neytiri doesn't like at all.
WhilebutAfterbutInitiallyEventually
??? - Who is Neytiri? - the story goes on but the characters have different names:
Avatar
Put in the conjunctions:
the settlers prepare to attack, Jake is blamed by the Na'vi and sentenced to death.
they kill him, they settlers arrive. Chief Eytucan is killed. John sustains injuries from Colonel Quaritch who is shot with arrows.
Neytiry risks her life to save Jake. Jake and Neytiri have each other and the two cultures resolve their differences.
AsthenJust beforefinally
Connecting two sentences with a conjunction
Put in the conjunctions:
1. It was very hot I opened the window.
2. I opened the window it was hot.
3. I wanted to phone you I didn't have your number.
4. I've been studying English I'm not getting better.
5. Shall we meet at home in town?
6. We met at home (we) learned for the test.
7. They like films Mr Scharwies shows them more often.
8. I usually don't study much now I want to do more.
andbutsosobutbutbecauseor
Connecting two sentences with a conjunction
TASK
Complete the second sentence so that it has a similar meaning to the first sentence, using the KEYWORD given.
Do not change the KEYWORD. You must use between two and five words, including the word given.
1.She wasn't very rich. She gave money to the beggar.ALTHOUGH
very rich she gave money to the beggar.
2. He left early. He wanted to arrive on time. SO THAT
He left early in time.
3. You have to put the alarm on. If not, it won't work. UNLESS
the alarm on, it won't work.
4. I don't earn a big salary. But if I did, I wouldn't buy a car.EVEN IF
a big salary, I wouldn't buy a car.
5. Take a sandwich. There might be no restaurant.IN CASE
Take a sandwichbe no restaurant.
6. There was a lot of noise. He managed to sleep.DESPITE
being there a lot of noise, he managed to sleep.
7. Sue likes Opera. Joe prefers jazz. (They have different tastes.)WHEREAS
Sue likes opera jazz.
8. The weather was bad. They enjoyed the trip.EVEN THOUGH
bad they enjoyed the trip.
9. He had the flu. He went to work.IN SPITE OF
having the flu he went to work.
Change your Conjunctions
Match the synonyms.
After that
Moreover
Because of that
however
Meanwhile
Then
At last ...
During this timeSecondlyFinallyDue toin contrastconsequentiallyBesideson the contraryAdditionallyFor this reasonafter a few hoursEventually
Linking words
Tick the right linking word.
4. Patrick is very tall ______ Smurf is very short.
8. I came early ______ I could talk to you privately.
2. I'm not leaving ______ I get an apology from you.
1. You can come to the meeting ______ you don't say anything.
3. I came here ______ you could give me an explanation.
6. I study for the exam today ______ I don't have to go tomorrow.
7. You look ______ you haven't eaten for a week.
5. You look ______ you've seen a ghost.
2. Tick the right linking word.
5. We'll go to the mountains on Saturday ______ it doesn't rain.
2. Are you OK? You look ______ you have a problem.
7. You can write the report when you want ______ it's ready by the end of the month.
4. ______ the job is very interesting, it's also very badly paid.
1. ______ I don't think she's perfect for the job, she's certainly better qualified than Steve.
8. It looks ______ the government has got a lot of problems.
3. I don't mind if you go out for lunch ______ you're back for the meeting at two.
6. The winters here are very cold ______ the summers are very hot.
3. Tick the right linking word.
2. ______ I don't approve of what you did, I'm not going to punish you for it.
1. I want Mary to be in charge ______ I get back from holiday.
3. I'm learning English ______ I can get a better job.